冲刺新高考英语书面表达20天集训Word版Day10你校正在组织英语作文比赛，请以你在某个方面取得进步的经历为题，写一篇短文参赛，内容包括：1.经历的过程；2.你的感受。注意：1.词数100左右；2.短文题目和首句已为你写好，不计入总数。AnExperienceofMakingProgressDearteachersandfellowstudents,I'mheretoshareoneofmyexperiencesofmakingprogress.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案解析】AnExperienceofMakingProgressDearteachersandfellowstudents,I'mheretoshareoneofmyexperiencesofmakingprogress.WhenIenteredhighschool,IfoundeverybodyelseinmyclasswasgoodatEnglishexceptme.Ihadasmallvocabularyandhaddifficultyunderstandingthepassages.However,Ididn'tloseheart.IwenttomyEnglishteacher,whoadvisedmetouseadictionarywhilereadingandtrytogetwhatthepassagesconveyedtome.Iworkedharder,followingtheteacher'sadvice.Gradually,IfeltbetterwhilereadingandbegantofindEnglishinteresting.NowIhavealreadycaughtupwithmyclassmates.Thisexperiencegivesmeabetterunderstandingofthesaying:Nothingistoodifficulttoawillingheart.【分析】这是一篇提纲类作文。要求考生以在某个方面取得进步的经历为题用英语写一篇短文参加作文比赛。【详解】第一步：审题体裁：提纲类作文时态：根据提示，时态应为一般过去时和一般现在时。结构：总分法要求：包含经历的过程；你的感受。第二步:列提纲（重点词组）fellow；share；progress；loseheart；convey；catchupwith第三步：连词成句1.Dearteachersandfellowstudents,I'mheretoshareoneofmyexperiencesofmakingprogress.2.WhenIenteredhighschool,IfoundeverybodyelseinmyclasswasgoodatEnglishexceptme.3.Ihadasmallvocabularyandhaddifficultyunderstandingthepassages.4.However,Ididn'tloseheart.5.IwenttomyEnglishteacher,whoadvisedmetouseadictionarywhilereadingandtrytogetwhatthepassagesconveyedtome.6.Iworkedharder,followingtheteacher'sadvice.7.Gradually,IfeltbetterwhilereadingandbegantofindEnglishinteresting.8.NowIhavealreadycaughtupwithmyclassmates.9.Thisexperiencegivesmeabetterunderstandingofthesaying:Nothingistoodifficulttoawillingheart.第四步：连句成篇1.表文章结构顺序：Firstofall,Firstly/First,Secondly/Second…Andthen,Finally,Intheend,Atlast2.表并列补充关系：Whatismore,Besides,Moreover,Furthermore,InadditionAswellas,notonly…but(also),including,3.表转折对比关系：while,meanwhile,However,Onthecontrary,but,Although+clause(从句),Inspiteof+n/doing,Ontheonehand…,Ontheotherhand…Some…,whileothers…,asfor,so…that…4.表因果关系：Because,As,So,Thus,Therefore,Asaresult连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。第五步：润色修改【点睛】文章结构合理，思路清晰，使用了恰当的连接词及词组使行文连贯，如“when，however，who”，也运用了一些高级词汇和表达，如“fellow；share；progress；loseheart；convey；catchupwith”以及状语从句“WhenIenteredhighschool,IfoundeverybodyelseinmyclasswasgoodatEnglishexceptme.”定语从句“IwenttomyEnglishteacher,whoadvisedmetouseadictionarywhilereadingandtrytogetwhatthepassagesconveyedtome.”等，增加了文章的亮点，体现了学生较高的英语学科素养。